Creative Paragraphs- Man In Space

This week we have been learning to rework our writing to make our paragraphs interesting for our audience. We started by writing a creative sentence about this picture. As a class we will choose Nate's sentence because we liked it the best and wrote a paragraph each to follow the chosen sentence. Here is the beginning of my story that starts with Nate's sentence.

A spaceman bravely walks out into the icy milkyway. has he floats out to the glare he look at the stars the stars are shining.Then he walks  around and he see a plaint it looks pink the he go to the plaint.

When he went to the plaint he saw something strange he did know what it was he went to see what it was it was like a poisonous potion  it was big he went to the poisonous potion and he look at it .Then he heard voices then he slowly went out to his spaceship

Then he went for a machine to find out what happening then he went to  see what they are.They were green aliens. They were small aliens but they had weapons.

They can shot but lackey he put some weapons but they herd a boy voices  in the spaceship.He made his way back to his spaceship to go and get his weapons.

He waited for a whole then he sol same aliens come to find him but he hide away then he thought why do i have to hurt them so he slowly went to earth.